今天，我想結(jié)合一篇雅思大作文的寫作跟大家分享一下構(gòu)思和產(chǎn)出思想和觀點(diǎn)的問(wèn)題海雪。
一、首先讓我們來(lái)一起看一下這篇大作文的題目：
Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.(2018/04/06)
二舱殿、下面我們就來(lái)一起針對(duì)話題做一些相關(guān)和快速的聯(lián)想和發(fā)散思維來(lái)幫助我們深入全面思考話題和獲得一些有用的觀點(diǎn)和啟發(fā)奥裸。
1、頭腦風(fēng)暴：
通勤時(shí)間長(zhǎng)沪袭，很讓人煩惱...上班地點(diǎn)與工作地點(diǎn)太遠(yuǎn)...市區(qū)住房成本高湾宙、人員太擁擠、綠地冈绊、公共休閑娛樂(lè)場(chǎng)所設(shè)施有限...企業(yè)選址在市中心扎堆侠鳄，原因是有聲譽(yù)、名氣高焚碌、配套服務(wù)好畦攘、人流高、效益好尤其是娛樂(lè)十电、餐飲、商業(yè)零售叹螟、酒店會(huì)展等...公共交通不發(fā)達(dá)...私家車太多....道路橋梁設(shè)施不足...城市太大鹃骂、人口太多...城市機(jī)遇多、收入高罢绽、醫(yī)療畏线、文化、教育資源豐富良价、優(yōu)質(zhì)...
2寝殴、個(gè)人閱歷反思：
以前上班每天通勤2小時(shí)，十分辛苦明垢；現(xiàn)在換了工作地點(diǎn)蚣常，每天步行半小時(shí)上班，健康又從容...一個(gè)外國(guó)友人住在一個(gè)風(fēng)景優(yōu)美的湖區(qū)痊银，每天坐動(dòng)車上下班...另外一個(gè)國(guó)內(nèi)朋友抵蚊，為了離單位近，在市中心購(gòu)房...廣州地鐵三號(hào)線每天人滿為患…
3、回顧問(wèn)題：
減少通勤的最佳方法是用公寓樓取代城市鬧市區(qū)的公園和綠地≌晟現(xiàn)在再來(lái)思考一下：為什么要減少通勤谷醉？因?yàn)橥ㄇ诨〞r(shí)間、勞累冈闭、沒(méi)有效益俱尼、生活方式不健康...有什么解決方案呢？比如在市中心租房...在市中心開發(fā)公寓樓也是一種方法萎攒，但會(huì)擠占城市本來(lái)就稀缺的綠地和公共空間遇八，惡化城市生態(tài)環(huán)境、影響市民身心健康躺酒、經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展和個(gè)人收入提高市區(qū)意義或者得不償失...好的方法是盤活現(xiàn)有市區(qū)地產(chǎn)和物業(yè)押蚤、鼓勵(lì)置換和租賃住房、改善公共交通體系羹应、疏散城市商業(yè)和產(chǎn)業(yè)功能揽碘、鼓勵(lì)經(jīng)濟(jì)轉(zhuǎn)型和網(wǎng)絡(luò)經(jīng)濟(jì)...
4、現(xiàn)在看看有沒(méi)有他山之石可以拿來(lái)攻一下自己的玉园匹。
唐老師范文解讀：
思路：先承認(rèn)論證題目的辦法的確有用雳刺，后找到這個(gè)辦法的缺陷并提出更好辦法。
理由：生活環(huán)境變差裸违、沒(méi)有休閑娛樂(lè)的場(chǎng)所掖桦、擁擠吵鬧的環(huán)境不利于身心健康、抵消減少通勤時(shí)間的好處
對(duì)策：在家遠(yuǎn)程辦公
5供汛、網(wǎng)上搜素相關(guān)資訊：《中國(guó)青年報(bào)》9 月5 日的一篇評(píng)論呼吁道：“對(duì)此枪汪，政府一方面需要治標(biāo)，通過(guò)更健全的公共交通和軌道交通建設(shè)怔昨，讓人們的通勤之路更加輕松快捷雀久；另一方面也更需治本，通過(guò)改善城市規(guī)劃趁舀、調(diào)控地區(qū)房?jī)r(jià)的方式赖捌，讓人們能夠在離住處更近的地方辦公，在離公司更近的地方生活矮烹≡奖樱”
6、明確主旨Thesis和寫作思路：
在市區(qū)擠占公園修建更多的公寓樓不失為一種減少一些通勤時(shí)間的治本的方法奉狈，但這種方法有害城市環(huán)境卤唉，弊大于利。更好的辦法是改善城市公共交通嘹吨、疏散城市工商業(yè)設(shè)施和功能搬味、修建衛(wèi)星城市境氢。
總體思路借鑒唐老師的思路，即先承認(rèn)建公寓樓的好處碰纬，再指出問(wèn)題萍聊，最后提出替代方案。
7悦析、注意事項(xiàng)：
在主體段創(chuàng)作時(shí)注意用以下幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)來(lái)推進(jìn)和支撐主旨寿桨。
Why/how
Evidence/example
So what
If not
Bigger impact
三、下面我們一起來(lái)開始文稿的創(chuàng)作：
Due to? the rising living cost of the mega city in many parts of the world nowadays, more and more people choose to travel long distance to their work from their home in the faraway suburbs. To solve this problem, some people suggest that more apartment buildings be built to replace the parks and gardens in the city center. Personally, there are more disadvantages than advantages for this piece of advice.
Undoubtedly, building more budget apartment buildings downtown can provide more affordable rooms for pathetic commuters to live near their company and save their commuting time. Instead of worrying about the high renting rate or sharing an apartment with other tenants who have some annoying personal oddities, they can then owning a cosy flat close to their workplace, walking or cycling to and from their job daily leisurely with much less time and energy. As a result, they can enjoy more time with their family, recharging themselves professionally, doing sport and having fun.
In contrast, if the construction of additional apartment buildings needs to squeeze the space of public green relaxation venue like parks and gardens, it will bring about more hazards than benefits. First, when parks and gardens were gone, city dwellers would have no place to do outdoor exercises and release pressure from their work. Second, the air of the city would become dirtier with few trees, meadows and lakes which was very harmful to the residents’ health. Last but not least, when the city is packed with more people, the city will become more crowded and noisier which may end up as a place less desirable for living and work.
In light of the above discussion, I would conclude that building apartment buildings close to the city center can cut down some commuting time yet worsen the living and working environment for the city dwellers. Planning satellite cities around the central metropolises, dispersing some of the non-essential functions of the super large cities to their satellite counterpart, transfering part of the businesses to the suburbs and improving the existing public transportation infrastructure are highly recommended to better cope with the issue under discussion.
四强戴、雅思大作文構(gòu)思與觀點(diǎn)擴(kuò)展小結(jié)
雅思大作文的構(gòu)思如果依據(jù)問(wèn)題類型的套路會(huì)比較快捷亭螟。比如我們這篇討論最佳方案的考題就可以用唐老師提出的：先承認(rèn)題目中方法有可取之處，后分析其不足骑歹，最后提出自己的意見预烙。對(duì)于主體中的其他理由、證據(jù)道媚、后果或例證等要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)可以用頭腦風(fēng)暴扁掸、自由聯(lián)想、網(wǎng)絡(luò)相關(guān)信息搜索等方式來(lái)收集和打開思路最域。最后還要對(duì)各種細(xì)節(jié)或事實(shí)進(jìn)行篩選谴分，依據(jù)自己對(duì)這些細(xì)節(jié)和要點(diǎn)的興趣、熟悉程度和駕馭能力精選其中的兩到三條放在自己的文章當(dāng)中來(lái)推進(jìn)和闡釋自己的觀點(diǎn)镀脂。一般來(lái)說(shuō)牺蹄，觀點(diǎn)要兼顧正反兩面，不能只有一種立場(chǎng)薄翅，否則就會(huì)顯得偏頗和缺乏說(shuō)服力沙兰，文章論證也會(huì)感覺(jué)沒(méi)有那么有力和充實(shí)。
總之翘魄，雅思大作文的構(gòu)思和觀點(diǎn)的擴(kuò)展對(duì)于寫好雅思大作文非常重要僧凰，在雅思大作文寫作無(wú)話可說(shuō)，言之無(wú)物的同學(xué)可以參考本講壇的方法來(lái)練習(xí)熟丸。如果大家只是滿足考試之前突擊背誦一些考試范文是費(fèi)時(shí)低效和不太可靠的，因?yàn)榭荚囎魑那ё內(nèi)f化伪节，遇到全新題目或全新視角的題目的情況會(huì)非常多光羞，這種時(shí)候靠默寫范文就很危險(xiǎn)，容易跑題怀大，況且即使碰到自己背誦過(guò)的考試題目纱兑，如果照搬他人文稿也容易因與其他背誦同一范文的考生雷同被認(rèn)定為作弊或而大大丟分。
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