Presentation＆Feedback

--- Well , what do you think about my presentation?

--- Do you want me to be frank?

? ? ?I know you worked very hard on it .

--- Yes , give it to me straight .

? ? ?I have my opinion too , but I will appreciate your comments and suggestions .

--- You said you have your own opinion about it .

? ? ?So how do you think it went ?

--- I thought it went OK at first , but I could feel that there were some bad transitions.

? ? ?I think I spent too much time on some slides , and didn't express them well .

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--- I agree on those points .

? ? ?But for me , it was flat .

? ? ?Five minutes into it , I had a ?hard time paying attention .

--- Flat? Do you mean my voice ?

--- Yes , that's part of it .

? ? ?There's very little passion almost like you are reading it .

? ? ?I'm sure you can do better .

? （Five minutes into the presentation , she lost interest in it .）

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--- Do you have any suggestions ?

--- First , let me say that I like the slides of themselves.

? ? That design were nice and easy to read .

? ? But the one thing you didn't do was engaging with the audience .

? ? You focused on the slides and didn't address the?audience .

--- Oh, I was trying to , but I guess I was too nervous.

? ? ? I didn't want to forget anything .

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--- You have a great smile .

? ? ?You need to show that smile and your expressions when you present .

? ? ?Make I contact .

--- When you present , I noticed you always do that .

? ? ?And your pauses between ideas .

? ? But it seems so easy for you .

--- For me , I look at the faces in the audience .

? ? ?I watch their expressions.

? ? ?I really try to communicate with them .

? ? ?Once I do that , it comes naturally , because it ?becomes real communication .

??（She advices him to show his smile and be more expressive .）

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--- You seem to enjoy it .

--- Well , I'm always nervous too before I get start it .

? ? ?But once I connect with the audience , I'm OK .!

--- So connecting with the audience is the key .

? ? ?Focus on them and not me , right ?

--- Yse, well put .

? ? ?And in fact , if you do that , you have to adjust your presentation .

? ? ?It has to flow , like in a real conversation .

? ? ?We have to respond to each other .

? ? ?And the pauses are so that the presentation can breath .

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--- Hemm , it seems so obvious , but I never thought it like that .

? ? That's a great advice .

? ? I wish we had talked before my presentation .

--- If we had , you may not have been opened like you are now .

? ? Anyway , I'm sure your next presentations will improve .

? ? It takes practice like anything .

? ? Don't be too hard on yourself .

--- No , I won't .?

? ? But next time I'll do better , and I hope you're there .

--- OK. Well , let's get back to work .

（To be hard on someone means to put pressure on them .）