——沈老師英文寫作系列二
（以Imagination主題寫作為例）
書面表達(dá)：根據(jù)下面文字及圖片衅澈，按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的文章。
審題：
1. 仔細(xì)閱讀材料內(nèi)容恃泪，迅速抓住材料的關(guān)鍵內(nèi)容（建議勾劃出各個段落的關(guān)鍵詞）谈撒。
Paragraph ?One:
imagination, ?mankind, ?civilization, ?invent, ?dreamed ?of, ?realities
Paragraph ?Two:
a ?great ?role ?and ?value, ?daydreaming, ?daily ?affairs…
Paragraph ?Three:
Parents, ?too ?much ?free ?time, ?waste ?opportunities ?for ?learning, ?not ?a ?gift ?to ?children
2. 閱讀寫作材料和要求坑律，快速構(gòu)思。
正確的和審題構(gòu)思需要快速準(zhǔn)確地梳理伯襟，不難看出猿涨，本次寫作主題寫作所提供的材料分三段。
想象力推動人類文明進步姆怪，讓人類的無數(shù)夢想變成現(xiàn)實叛赚。（這是高大上的層面）
想象力對于普通人日常生活的意義——讓我們的生活更方便、多彩稽揭。（這是老百姓的日常層面）
一些父母認(rèn)為想象是浪費孩子寶貴的學(xué)習(xí)時間俺附。（這是現(xiàn)實層面，同時也是矛盾沖突的焦點——即對于一件事/問題/現(xiàn)象的兩種不同的看法或認(rèn)識淀衣。認(rèn)識到這一點昙读，就會有利于打開分析問題和解決問題的思路召调，也就是膨桥，造成問題的原因是什么？該如何解決或找出對策唠叛？）
3. 腦洞大開只嚣，思如泉涌。
每一段都有每一段的任務(wù)（一般文章分三艺沼、四段册舞，多數(shù)按三段立意即可）。
第一段：概述材料內(nèi)容——開門見山障般，突出主題调鲸，切忌七彎八轉(zhuǎn)。
結(jié)合第2點的分析挽荡，快速連詞成句藐石，連句成段。巧妙運用第1點勾畫出來的關(guān)鍵詞即可成句定拟。
Example ?1: ?Imagination, ?which ?has ?contributed ?a ?lot ?to ?mankind’s ?development ?and ?civilization, ?is ?also ?of ?great ?importance ?in ?everyone’s ?daily ?life. ?However, ?parents ?today ?tend ?to ?prepare ?children ?for ?their ?future, ?thus ?harming ?children’s ?ability ?of ?imagination.（36 ?words,小曹同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：要點齊全于微，詞匯高級，書寫漂亮青自。句式結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊合理株依，定語從句、分詞延窜、銜接詞運用自如恋腕。
Example ?2: ?In ?our ?daily ?life, ?we ?all ?use ?imagination, ?which ?has ?led ?mankind ?to ?its ?current ?brilliant ?civilization. ?However, ?some ?parents ?prepare ?their ?children’s ?future, ?not ?knowing ?the ?value ?of ?imagination.(30 ?words, ?小聶同學(xué)習(xí)作)
點評：
優(yōu)點：要點基本齊全，字跡工整逆瑞，會用從句荠藤、分詞祈远、銜接。
缺點：未能將文本過濾加工商源，有原文痕跡车份，所以在第2小點上有失偏頗。
Example ?3: ?Imagination, ?which ?we ?use ?in ?almost ?everything, ?not ?only ?helps ?people ?fulfill ?their ?dreams ?but ?also ?makes ?great ?contributions ?to ?the ?development ?of ?civilization. ?But ?unfortunately, ?parents ?today ?often ?sacrifice ?children’s ?free ?time ?and ?force ?them ?to ?follow ?their ?wills, ?causing ?great ?damage ?to ?children’s ?imagination. ?(46 ?words, ?錢同學(xué)習(xí)作)
點評：2個字牡彻，高級扫沼。但字?jǐn)?shù)超過，這是有柴的人的通病庄吼。解決辦法是寫作的時候忘掉原材料缎除。
Example ?4: ?Imagination ?plays ?an ?important ?role ?not ?only ?in ?one’s ?personal ?life, ?but ?also ?in ?social ?development. ?However, ?nowadays ?many ?parents ?are ?taking ?away ?children’s ?imagination ?by ?their ?so-called ?“best ?intentions”.（30 ?words,小江同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：要點基本齊全，有銜接語总寻，但第二點概括得模糊器罐，不具體。
第二段：續(xù)寫想象力的重要性渐行。
本段主題句應(yīng)該表明態(tài)度轰坊，想象力是重要的，因為……首句為統(tǒng)領(lǐng)祟印，應(yīng)言簡意賅肴沫。一個主句加一個從句或分詞即可。
分論應(yīng)為：想象力如何重要蕴忆？對誰重要颤芬？在哪些方面重要？
Example ?1: ?The ?world ?needs ?imagination ?because ?it ?inspires ?creativity ?and ?helps ?change ?the ?world ?for ?the ?better, ?otherwise, ?we ?wouldn’t ?enjoy ?the ?convenience ?of ?modern ?life. ?Meanwhile, ?if ?we ?keep ?imagination ?off, ?life ?would ?be ?much ?more ?boring ?as ?there ?is ?no ?fun ?left, ?only ?with ?bare ?facts. ?Moreover, ?imagination ?in ?children ?encourages ?them ?to ?explore ?the ?outside ?world, ?thus ?achieving ?greater ?successes ?than ?their ?parents ?and ?grandparents. ?(67 ?words, ?小朱同學(xué)習(xí)作)
點評：正反論證運用恰當(dāng)套鹅，能靈活運用虛擬語氣站蝠。說理基本清楚，但未能有效展開卓鹿，所以字?jǐn)?shù)不足菱魔。
Example ?2: ?Imagination ?works ?as ?a ?bridge ?between ?creative ?thinking ?and ?reality. ?The ?inventions ?of ?light ?and ?smart ?phones ?went ?down ?in ?history ?with ?the ?help ?of ?imagination. ?Stories, ?movies, ?music ?are ?all ?products ?of ?people’s ?imagination. ?Imagination ?is ?a ?big ?part ?of ?our ?life. ?In ?other ?words, ?we ?can’t ?even ?live ?without ?it. ?What’s ?more, ?scientists ?believe ?that ?imagination ?is ?the ?future ?of ?communication ?with ?no ?phones ?needed ?in ?the ?centuries ?to ?come. ?（72 ?words,小肖同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：有主題有正反論證，語言流暢减牺，凸顯功力豌习。缺點：最后一句語焉不詳。
Example ?3: ?There ?is ?no ?denying ?that ?everything ?originates ?from ?imagination, ?which ?plays ?a ?critical ?role ?in ?the ?development ?off ?the ?world ?that ?we ?live ?in. ?It ?imagination ?that ?brings ?inspiration ?to ?scientists ?and ?makes ?them ?well-known ?around ?the ?world ?for ?their ?creativity. ?Were ?it ?not ?for ?imagination, ?we ?couldn’t ?have ?such ?a ?brilliant ?civilization ?where ?everyone ?enjoys ?the ?benefit ?of ?technology. ?So ?it ?is ?necessary ?to ?attach ?importance ?to ?develop ?imagination, ?especially ?for ?children.（小郭同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：說理清楚拔疚，結(jié)構(gòu)高級肥隆，用詞熟練老道，功力深厚稚失。合理運用了句型栋艳、虛擬語氣。
Example ?4: ?Imagination ?is ?one ?of ?the ?best ?gifts ?given ?by ?God. ?Whoever ?wants ?to ?live ?a ?comfortable ?life ?can ?not ?achieve ?without ?it, ?let ?alone ?its ?importance ?for ?creating ?new ?technical ?inventions. ?Imagination ?helps ?us ?dig ?out ?the ?endless ?possibilities ?of ?our ?limited ?life. ?The ?stage ?extends ?as ?far ?as ?your ?imagination ?goes. ?What’s ?more, ?what ?you ?imagine ?reveals ?your ?desperate ?desire, ?which ?will ?show ?you ?the ?right ?direction. ?In ?face ?of ?adversities, ?a ?man ?with ?imagination ?is ?more ?likely ?to ?stay ?optimistic, ?which ?makes ?you ?much ?closer ?to ?success. ?(89 ?words,小季同學(xué)習(xí)作)
點評：語言優(yōu)美句各，富有詩意吸占。卻也思路開闊晴叨，講在點子上富有道理。一個字：quite ?to ?the ?point ?and ?beautiful.
第三段：如何培養(yǎng)孩子的想象力矾屯。
Example ?1: ?For ?parents, ?it ?is ?of ?vital ?importance ?to ?give ?children ?free ?time, ?which ?allows ?them ?to ?develop ?the ?habit ?of ?thinking ?by ?themselves. ?On ?top ?of ?it, ?giving ?children ?the ?opportunity ?of ?creating ?things, ?like ?drawing ?or ?making ?up ?a ?story ?can ?be ?an ?effective ?way ?to ?cultivate ?their ?imagination. ?In ?all, ?imagination ?is ?so ?meaningful ?that ?we ?can’t ?live ?without ?it. ?Never ?can ?we ?underestimate ?its ?power ?to ?our ?society ?and ?human ?development.（74 ?words, ?小莊同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：自成體系兼蕊，有觀點，有論述件蚕。點子合理孙技，貼近生活。
Example ?2: ?Children ?are ?the ?future ?of ?the ?world, ?so ?it’s ?of ?vital ?importance ?to ?develop ?their ?imagination. ?We ?should ?give ?them ?opportunity ?and ?time ?to ?imagine. ?Parents ?need ?to ?be ?patient ?and ?listen ?to ?their ?children ?carefully ?when ?they ?ask ?questions. ?Also, ?adults ?should ?keep ?in ?mind ?that ?imagining ?is ?not ?a ?waste ?of ?time ?and ?it’s ?necessary/ ?advisable ?to ?give ?their ?children ?praise ?and ?encouragement ?when ?they ?show ?their ?imagination. ?（69 ?words, ?小陶同學(xué)習(xí)作）
點評：結(jié)構(gòu)合理排作，建議具體合適牵啦，有主題句，有分論妄痪。
4. Roger’s ?version
Imagination ?has ?been ?playing ?an ?important ?role ?both ?in ?promoting ?mankind’s ?civilization ?& ?social ?development ?and ?in ?improving ?our ?daily ?life ?or ?making ?everything ?more ?convenient. ?However, ?some ?parents ?don’t ?think ?highly ?of/ ?value ?developing ?children’s ?imagination ?just ?because ?they ?think ?it ?is ?a ?waste ?of ?time ?for ?studying. ?（48 ?words）
Personally, ?I ?don’t ?agree ?with ?those ?parents. ?Undoubtedly, ?imagination ?is ?an ?important ?quality ?which ?helps ?people ?do ?and ?think ?creatively ?and ?critically. ?There ?is ?much ?evidence ?that ?throughout ?history, ?many ?significant ?advances ?have ?been ?made ?owing ?to ?people’s ?incredible ?(crazy) ?ideas ?and ?imagination, ?which ?were ?not ?recognized ?and ?even ?strongly ?opposed ?by ?their ?contemporaries（同時代的人）. ?In ?this ?sense, ?imaginative ?ability ?has ?been ?pushing ?the ?human ?society ?forward. ?As ?for ?our ?common ?people, ?it ?is ?creativity ?and ?imagination ?that ?produce ?so ?many ?wonderful ?ideas ?and ?inventions, ?with ?whose ?help ?we ?are ?able ?to ?look ?at ?any ?situation ?from ?different ?angles, ?and ?to ?mentally ?explore ?the ?past ?and ?the ?future ?as ?well. ?Every ?small ?step ?makes ?for ?a ?giant ?leap ?for ?all ?mankind.（126 ?words）
As ?a ?matter ?of ?fact, ?nurturing/cultivating/developing ?students’ ?imagination ?is ?especially ?important/ ?significant/ ?critical ?for ?their ?growth. ?For ?one ?thing, ?parents ?and ?teachers ?should ?give ?children ?enough ?time ?and ?space ?and ?encourage ?them ?to ?think ?independently ?and ?solve ?problems ?they ?encounter ?alone, ?which ?is ?a ?must-have ?/necessary ?condition ?for ?the ?inspiration ?of ?imagination. ?For ?another, ?it ?is ?advisable ?that ?students ?try ?to ?put ?what ?they ?think ?of ?and ?imagine ?into ?real ?practice. ?By ?practicing ?imagination, ?we ?can ?not ?only ?broaden ?our ?mind ?and ?perspectives ?but ?also ?sharpen ?various ?skills ?needed ?in ?academic ?learning. ?Last ?but ?not ?the ?least, ?a ?certain ?degree ?of ?daydreaming ?provides ?temporary ?happiness, ?calmness ?and ?relief ?from ?stress, ?which ?is ?beneficial ?especially ?to ?us ?Senior ?3 ?students. ?（119 ?words）
